Friday, 9 May 2014

Fear Factor

I flung off the tissue that was shading the food in the sea blue colored bowl and I find myself looking at a part of raw tuna. My stomach yelled out NO but at the back of my head thought I had to eat it. So I clawed the slippery thing and my tongue and the fish collided.

Now if you tasted a mushroom pizza with blue cheese, the fish would've tasted 10 X worse.

My teeth started smashing and the tuna started grinding to mush. Then I closed my eyes tight to prepare for the worse and the food went down the throught. I thought I was gonna hurl it back up but I opened my mouth and showed that there was nothing left. When I looked around and I saw an empty seat beside me so I guessed I came second.YUK!

A couple of days later I had my hands behind my back like a prisoner and a bowl of jelly in front of me.GO!!! I smashed my face into the jelly like a lunatic but then used my tongue like a digger and scooped the dessert into my maw. It was like 1000 X better than the fish. I heard a few cheers and in a matter of seconds my bowl was clean and I came first. YAY!

(LIKE A BOSS!!!!!!) :-)

This is what I used to make this:
*Beginning grabs the readers attention by starting at an most exciting bit
* Creating suspense by keeping the reader thinking till the end
* Used exciting word choices verbs (doing words) Specific nouns (name words)
* Used I statements
* No repeated words or sentence starters
* Paragraphs to make it easier to read.

1 comment:

  1. Awesome work Marcus!
    That raw tuna would have n ruined your apatite,
    the jelly would be delicious.
    Keep up the great work!


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